I recently wrote a personal statement of purpose for admission to nursing

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Good afternoon,

I recently wrote a personal statement of purpose for admission to nursing

school and I would like for someone to please review and give feedback if necessary. I am not 100% confident about it. Thanks so much in advance! It is as follows:

Statement of Purpose

Nursing is more than a profession; rather it is an ever-changing model of care which provides exceptional service to others. Nursing provides a plethora of opportunities for growth and it requires continuous research and learning. This desire to learn, educate and provide service to others has moved me to want to grow in the field, both professionally and personally.
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